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Grandma's Kitchen:
1690 Badgley Road, home away from home. Though it is not the house they have always occupied, the warmth and comfort makes it feel as though they have lived there for a lifetime. Each kitchen my Grandma has occupied has felt this way though.
As we arrive to the snow covered white house with green shutters, the only house on Badgley not made entirely of stone, it does not look out of place in any way. The one-story, white sided house with green shutters and matching roof is my home away from home. The display of twinkling white lights and a nativity have replaced the tall sunflowers mixed with red white and blue perennials encompassed by the ever so tasteful electric fence to keep the deer away. (Oh, how we’ve begged and pleaded for them to take it down!) Grandpa’s bright orange lawn mower now lives inside the garage, rather than just outside of it. I park in the ice covered driveway, my cousins’ matching BMW’s rest easily atop the snow in the side yard. Aunt Terry, Uncle Doug, and company have yet to arrive from their long drive from Freemont Michigan; this is no surprise.
Hannah and I enter, eager to help. We make the routine run up and down the steep basement stairway to help Grandpa find the best knife to carve his prized turkey. Grandma needs an extra ladle to use for the gravy, up and down between the two kitchens we go. Before we would eat downstairs in the beautifully finished basement. Grandpa has a hard time moving between the two floors now though, so the smaller upstairs dining area and a special card table set up in the living room for the “kids” suffices.
Soon Aunt Deb and Uncle Jack arrive and the fun begins. Aunt Deb is my Mom’s older sister. She cringes when she is mistaken for her around their old stomping grounds, Aunt Deb is ten years her senior. I grew up visiting my cousins, Lauren, the closest with me in age, Ross, who has always felt like the big brother I never had, and Lindsey, the trouble maker. Our families, living only 15 minutes away from each other, have always been very close. Sometimes it feels as if the Clinks, my Mom’s brother and his family live states away. Three hours is more distant than you may think.
Aunt Deb, Uncle Jack, and my Mom and Dad are always the life of the party. Each of them has an absolutely contagious laugh. It is difficult to be in a room with all four of them and not to be next to rolling on the ground in tears.
As Uncle Jack and I are figuring out new nonchalant ways to flip one another off, Grandpa says the prayer. It is finally time, one of the two meals I look forward to all year long is about to commence. Lauren, a year younger than me, and Hannah, still the baby at 14, hurry toward the heaps of steaming goodness. We figure that if we are still considered young enough to sit at the kids table, we won’t feel to bad about being first in line for the goods.
I go first for Grandma’s noodles. Everyone scrambles to get the biggest heap on their plate. Only Alex, who still enjoyed baby food long after his transition into solids should have begun, skips out on the famous dish. We of course never cease to chide him for his “poor decision making” when it comes to the best parts of Grandma and Grandpa’s cooking. Opting only for a roll, he is not the one to push in front of, to say the least.
Back again to the noodles, I can taste them as I write this. Only a few times a year do we get to indulge in such a delicacy. Though I’ve stood in her cluttered kitchen for years as she’s made the noodles from scratch, the doughy pieces sitting atop the island as she prepares the next item on her list, I haven’t ever dared to attempt the recipe. She complains each year that they, “weren’t her best,” though each time I take a bite I couldn’t imagine anything better. The noodles are Grandma’s staple. When I think of the thick warm pieces covered in heavy gravy mixed with bits of turkey, or chicken, or sometimes beef, I feel the love and devotion that go into each piece. The grueling process is not for her, but for us. Her small family that she manages to bring together year after year during the holidays.
Sixteen & Reckless:
When I was sixteen, I was a badass. As I’ve grown older (and wiser?) I know that I made some potentially life-threatening decisions. When I say life-threatening, I mean it in more ways than one. My life would have been threatened if ever my parents had found out about my secret trip to he Windy City.
On a friday in early November, I found myself absolutely disgusted with everything possible. I was sick of my friends, sick of home, sick of school. Around lunchtime that fateful day, I decided, “what the hell, I’m gonna take a road trip!”
At the time, my boyfriend of two years was living and working in Chicago. A three plus hour drive from Jackson would mean crossing two state lines and driving in heavy Chicago traffic. Hey, if I’d driven through rush hour in downtown Jackson, what was downtown Chicago around 5 p.m.?
Stupidly, stupidly, stupidly I set out just after school. I fibbed and said I would be shopping in Ann Arbor with a girlfriend and then returning home to stay the night with her. I remember waiting and waiting for my parents to call and ask why they had seen Drew driving around town when we were supposedly together. Thankfully, karma was working with me that day.
I set out with just enough Camel No. 9’s -yuck- to get me through the long and lonely drive to the Windy City. Three CD’s and half a pack later, I was learning quickly that the speed limit was a myth in rush hour Chicago. Apparently, 80 was the new 55, who knew!? A fearless and experienced driver’s license holder for four months, I totally had it under control.
Eight near death experiences later (or something like that), I was cruising into the suburbs wondering why Trevor had told me he lived in Chicago. In my mind, being able to see the Sears Tower from your balcony didn’t count, but hey, I’ve been wrong before. Finally arriving, relief washed over my high school sweetheart ran out to parallel park my car.
Trev’s roommate dropped us off downtown later on that evening. He still tells me years later that my face has never lit up the way it did when we walked into the Coach store on Michigan Avenue. This though, was not at all the most memorable part of my journey.
Across the street from Coach sits the Grand Luxe Cafe. Trevor and I waited more than an hour to be seated in the glass room that overlooks the beautiful shops that adorn Michigan Ave. We sat in a cozy booth right against the floor to ceiling glass. The room was dark and the decoration elegant. In my sixteen year old mind, this was as romantic as it could get.
I ordered a coffee and we sat across from one another holding hands atop the table. This is still a tradition he likes to uphold, much to my anti-public display of affection stance.
- Needs some development -
I would like to say that I’m not quite as cheesy now as I was then, but last November we ate at the Grand Luxe again on our four-year-anniversary, and the magic was just as present as it was the first time. It felt like our place. We somehow pulled off sitting at the same exact table, ordered the same meal, held hands and enjoyed each others company again as if we had not seen each other for months like it had been our first time.
Each time I am in Chicago I walk past this restaurant amidst my shopping and smile. I could not imagine sitting in that place with anyone else, and I cannot imagine a better meal in Chicago that the Grand Luxe chicken parmesan.
The second one is almost embarrassing toward the end, I was running out of steam and it got a bit mushy, so my apologies. I like the beginning, I'd like to think it was entertaining. Again, let me know where it could take me. Obviously, the vivid description of the meal would be yet to come from my Grand Luxe meal.
Although I can't say that I know you very well, your second piece certainly felt more like you. The first one was all right, but I kept wondering why your story included neither coffee nor cigarettes. I got my wish with "Sixteen & Reckless." This is so funny to me, because I remember driving my 270,000-mile old Chevy Caprice up to Kalamazoo (without my parents' permission) to see my boyfriend here at K, with a similar excuse and incredibly similar fears (what happens when my mom drives by my friend's house and my car isn't there?). Anyway, I thought I was quite the deviant driving an hour away, obviously I had no idea. Jackson to Chicago is quite the drive, especially for a 16-year-old. Is it irresponsible of me to say I'm impressed?
ReplyDeleteI love your introduction, this idea of you as a badass contradicts your sappy dinner scene later, but I don't think this is a bad thing. You're a sappy badass, what's wrong with that? You could definitely juxtapose the two and play that to your advantage.
No need starting a new piece, Steph. You've got a winner right here. Can't wait to see what it becomes.
Stephanie, which piece do you want us to workshop Thursday?
ReplyDeleteWell, after talking to and reading Alexis' comment, I'm thinking I'd like to work out the second piece! Nix the first one.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you chose that one!! I like the beginning of it a lot (and it Was entertaining)... it Does sound a lot like you. In terms of structuring though I wonder if it would work to condense it--so that it gets to speak about where you ended up: the food and your relationships. Like start in the middle-ish and push to expand it more & see what you get? I think it could still sound like you and be concentrated (concentrated as in: "dense"... not "with direction"... you definitely already have direction)
ReplyDeleteI think Alexis is right, too, that you could juxtapose your different parts... would that help you get at your piece in a way that helps to see the bigger picture?
That was kind of ramble-y. Let me know if it didn't make sense? I think you have something good going here! (& really like your coffee-mug background!)
I'm glad you comment at the end of your blog that the food description at the café is yet to come. I was waiting to hear the food element of your piece, so I'm glad you didn't leave it out on purpose! I do like the beginning when you say that you were at badass at 16...personally, I wish I could say that about myself but it's completely false. That image of you runs throughout your memoir with the details you give about the drive to Chicago, and your funny comment about him living the suburbs (note to suburban kids everywhere: stop saying you live in Chicago, because the suburbs aren't Chicago.) I feel like at times you get caught up in the story, and you take a lot of time to explain the series of events when I would like to hear more about your relationship with Trevor, and your experience at this café (which I know you are planning to do). So I agree with Kelsey that you might consider condensing some of your story in the middle because it doesn't help me get to know you in particular. I'm glad you went with this piece, and like Alexis said, I don't know you very well, but I can still find you and your voice in this piece. Good job!
ReplyDeleteYou definitely made a good choice by going with the second piece--the beginning is super funny and your voice/personality comes through really well. I too was waiting and waiting for the food descriptions--so once you develop those it'll really enhance the piece and maybe even introduce new themes or bring out an already existing one. Maybe you could say more about your bf (without getting too mushy)--or how often you get to see him since he lives a ways away--earlier on so that readers get a better sense of your relationship.
ReplyDeleteWhy did you guys choose to eat at the Grand Luxe?
You have a great start Stephie! This piece has a lot of potential. Of course I want to know about the food but I guess I can wait...I really like the dual narration especially the part where you realize how dangerous driving to Chicago was! I definitely don't think you're being too mushy at the end. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteI get a great sense of your voice reading this piece. Nice. I like the self-deprecating and self-conscious humor and narration. I think that they work really well.
ReplyDeleteI agree with what others have said about juxtaposing the two presented aspects of your identity. Also, a deeper description of Chicago and the meal you're having would be great. Was this your first time in Chicago? If it was, you must have had some strong impressions of it, especially because you were meeting your boyfriend there. More on the meal would be great too, especially if you bring it back at the end 4 years later.
Hey Stephanie.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you chose the second one too. There's nothing like that sneaking-out-of-your-parents'-house feeling. I miss it.
However, even though I enjoyed hearing about your fears while sneaking out, I wanted more out of it. I think more directly contrasting the half a pack of cigarettes—were you smoking them out of habit? Out of fear? Because you were hungry?—and your amazing time at Grand Lux. Also more about the horribleness of driving through Chicago rush hour. You have so much room for description, I’m excited to read what you come up with in your second draft.
Also, whenever I visit Chicago to meet half-way between Kzoo and MN with my mom, we go to Grand Lux! It's such a beautiful place with such a great view, I would really work that in. I think it would be really beneficial. Maybe a hyperlink to the website or some of the views from those windows? (I checked and there are some pretty great ones on google).
Also, I got a good picture of you from your habits and inner thoughts, but I didn't get to see Trevor, other than that he likes PDA and that you're High School sweethearts.
Great establishment of voice, love the irony it kicks off with, I guess we've all at some point made an assumption about something like traffic in a place we don't know only to have it backfire completely. Also, the short paragraphs make for an easy, online-friendly reading.
ReplyDeleteOn the note of onlne-friendliness.. is there a way to male the background of the text more solid? I found the opacity a little distracting.
I agree that you should go with the second piece. I liked the food descriptions in the first one, but it took me a little while to get into the story. Maybe too many names flying around? I'm not totally sure.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Alexis in that I heard your voice more in the second one. What an experience! I've had my license for about three months now, have lived next to Chicago my entire life, and have still not braved the horrors of rush hour traffic while behind the wheel. That's pretty hard core!
Since your boy friend is a prominent character in this piece and looks like he becomes a main focus later, I think you should develop him as a character more.
Wow, this is a fantastic start Stephanie! The second piece does seem a bit more natural and effortless than the first one, so I too am glad you picked it. Your voice really comes out throughout the piece, and I love your impulsive attitude at the beginning. You as the narrator seem very real, because you poke fun at yourself and remain the same throughout the piece.
ReplyDeleteI've never been to the Grand Lux, it sounds amazing! For some reason the scene where you're driving to Chicago reminded me of Bourdain's trip on the dangerous highway -- maybe you could even use descriptive imagery and drama to describe the terror of driving through Chicago traffic as a 16 year old! I also think that character development of your boyfriend would be great, the connection between you both is obvious and I think that developing him more earlier in the story might work well.
Can't wait to read about the food, great work on this Stephanie!
Steph,
ReplyDeleteI definitely like the second piece and think it has a lot of potential. From the very first sentence I was intrigued. I think your writing sounds more natural, more like you than the first piece. I think the main suggestion I have for the first piece is to add in some more food descriptions earlier on. Or maybe.. this might be a stretch.. but could you do something about the "tastes" of your trip. The tastes of nicotine on your tounge, the taste of guilt and pleasure that you felt from going behind their backs? The taste of the coffee and of being young and in love? Maybe this is a bite far fetched, but it could, perhaps, offer an interesting angle if you don't have too many concrete food examples to talk about. I'm looking forward to work shopping your piece tomorrow!
Stephanie, I really enjoyed reading what you have so far. I agree with Alexis when she says that although I don't know you very well, the piece really feels like you. I, too, have enjoyed a meal at the Grand Luxe Cafe, and my tendency toward nostalgia and sentimentality really loved the way you recreated the moment two years later.
ReplyDeleteYour narration is wonderful, enjoyable, and the story flows very well, but of course needs development in areas. I think with this, and with an increased presence of food, it would be fantastic.